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030802 Until Eternity 2Until Eternity

Standing here, waiting
gazing at the sapphire sea
pondering how long it shall be

Hearing the whisper of wind,
gazing at the clouded sky
waiting to ask the needed...

Why must I wait for thee,
my one that shall never come?
Why must I wait for thee,
until the day has gone?

If I do know that it is futile
why do I stand in wait?
Soon I'll surely meet your fate.

The gray clouds up above,
the winds through my hair,
vague memories of one so fair.

I shall never once forget
the day that thee gone, and
I will never once forgive that
I did not know was wrong.

I will stand here waiting,
forever, just for thee,
for you

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Date Taken:Jul 31, 2010, 11:24:19 AM
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120607 Empty Pagesby =TalizmynVox

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2012 06 07 Empty Pages
There's a sense of anxiety - I'm forgetting something important. There's something that I need to do and I don't know what it is. I'm just staring at empty pages.

© Talizmyn 2012

Critique by ~saevusWinds Jul 3, 2012, 1:04:16 PM

I see that the focus of the picture was done mistakenly to the edge of the book or the last bit of ribbon. I would have made the actual focus the hand, so instead of the focus being on the book, it was the hand, not able to write anything on the blank pages due to writer's block/ emotions that she was unable to fully express. After all, I feel like its less about the book (whose symbolism is usually new chances, beginnings, and possibilities) and more about the frozen hand, lost in constant stalemate. I'm not very fond of the distracting ribbons or the odd way she is holding the book. It seems very awkward and unnatural to me. I do like how she's under a tree, but the poor focusing almost fully defeated the purpose of it. I also find the ring and the watch distracting if it doesn't serve any purpose to the photo. It seems even more cluttered than it needs to be. I do see the jeans and the grass, and I cannot help but think that if the focus was done better, it would be noticed more. The dark blue against the yellow green is actually sort of pretty. Another thing that isn't so much about the photo but its content. I have seen so many concepts and photos, drawings, and literature about empty pages, and everything you described in the comments section. It would have been interesting if you would have made a spin on it, like writing all over it, but in bold in the center of the page , there was the word empty on it. There would have been an interesting and clear concept, despite the pages still being filled with words, that didn't make it anymore full or meaningful, and therefore, the pages were still empty. Something like that could have been executed way better.

Remember though: Everything needs to start somewhere. Try this again and see where it takes you.

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~F3rd4 Jul 3, 2012 Hobbyist Photographer

Whats the point of this, i dont get it .. Blured photo of somebody writing something down ... Really bad

=TalizmynVox Jul 3, 2012 Professional General Artist

The hands are blurred intentionally - the focus is on the empty lines on the paper.
"Really bad" doesn't help me. How about something constructive? What would you differently?

~F3rd4 Jul 4, 2012 Hobbyist Photographer

The critique you've got on this, is answer to all your questions

~MorkePhotography Jul 3, 2012 Photographer

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